Thank you, dear anon, this was exactly what I wanted. Oh man, I'm having a hard time finding words. ><
I loooove the small details you put in each flash of sex scene, the way you tease Olivia as well as the reader with what's coming, or what could be coming.
Man, I got to the end and was thinking "aaah, where's the sex?!" And I realized it was behind me! I'd already read it and it was AMAZING. So, so very much like the show. it's beautiful.
As someone else posted already, you've really captured Olivia's inquisitiveness and her curiosity, her willingness to believe and look closer into the heart of a mystery. But I also think that you've really captured the mannerisms of both boys very well. I was struck by Lincoln asking Olivia what's wrong during her very first flash, and how much like a reaction from him would be. I also loved how willing they were to take direction from her and to do as she asked without asking their own questions.
This is just... really lovely. Thank you, mystery writer! This is the best!!! <3
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Re: A Slip in Time Saves Nine - 2/2 - (Olivia/Lincoln/Peter, Amber!verse)
Date: 2011-12-22 05:18 am (UTC)Thank you, dear anon, this was exactly what I wanted. Oh man, I'm having a hard time finding words. ><
I loooove the small details you put in each flash of sex scene, the way you tease Olivia as well as the reader with what's coming, or what could be coming.
Man, I got to the end and was thinking "aaah, where's the sex?!" And I realized it was behind me! I'd already read it and it was AMAZING. So, so very much like the show. it's beautiful.
As someone else posted already, you've really captured Olivia's inquisitiveness and her curiosity, her willingness to believe and look closer into the heart of a mystery. But I also think that you've really captured the mannerisms of both boys very well. I was struck by Lincoln asking Olivia what's wrong during her very first flash, and how much like a reaction from him would be. I also loved how willing they were to take direction from her and to do as she asked without asking their own questions.
This is just... really lovely. Thank you, mystery writer! This is the best!!! <3
PS, booo, all my fringe icons are on LJ D: